In describing an underwater scene, the student has built a fascinating picture with master strokes
of figurative and sensory language. The elegant use of metaphors, similes, personification,
oxymoron and alliteration is well-supported by rich and sophisticated vocabulary. Sounds and
sights have been weaved fluently into the description, allowing the reader to create mental
pictures. Some instances of advanced punctuation have been flaunted by the student to create an
impact. The choice of each word is deliberate and purposeful.
